Pretty nice game! Want more… IDK if it's true or not in real phone because I just try to see it in responsive web design mode. When I enable the touch simulation, the game menu doesn't get toggle when it's click. It does appear when you hover over them, but in mobile they don't have hover effect right? Anyway, just want to mention that just in case I'm wrong, I apologize!
So now my main issue is how the fuck does one choose who to romance when everyone is written so bloody amazingly. I'm genuinely stuck! Lol this was such a great and pleasant read. And I'm so glad its ongoing and got updated recently. There is such great stories tht get abandoned its wonderful when i find one that is so nice and actually gets updated. This was really so great. I love leese even tho I love everyone right now lmao but he is definitely a front-runner. Love tht the sex scenes aren't all vague because that Normally is a huge disappointment in alot of stories. These are adults after all. So I quite enjoyed those. MC seems to have so much depth I'm excited to continue the story. Overall I just wanted to say well done and thank you! You made my day a bit brighter with this read. ✨️
It's a damn good game, it has a pretty interesting plot and quite a lot of potential, actually. I'd say that my only complain would be the descriptions and length of the sex scenes, as the currently present ones feel slightly "dull".
Thank you! And I agree. I do feel like my sex scenes are lacking so far. But when I think of how I could improve it, I can't think beyond what's already written. It's definitely something I'm trying to improve here and there as I work on Chapter 3. If you don't mind me asking, in your opinion (and anyone else), what would make it less "dull"? Is it just the length and neeing more details? Maybe another perspective will help me. (Sorry if that's weird to ask)
Although a bit experienced with writing both nsfw and sfw stuff, I can't give a lot of advice, as styles may vary greatly. Still, I would give a more in-depth description of everything that can be described; some more "steamy" descriptions regarding the interaction between the bodies of the individuals involved in the "act", like, how they feel internally and externally (perhaps changing as per previous choices/interactions?), how the enviroment they're in affects their act and all that. I'd also recommend take a look on other works, take them as examples and improve your style's description/length.
Quick question? Will flirting with more than one of them effect their opinion on you? I can't choose between Leese/Lea and Gabriel so I've just been flirting with them both. But I dont wanna do that if it'll cause a bad ending. :(
No, you won't get a bad ending from this. However, some ROs will react if you're flirting with someone else, but under certain circumstances. I don't want to say anymore to avoid spoilers though :>
I'm looking into the problem still but I'm assuming it's something to do with the save name input and certain browsers. I'll probably disable this feature for now until someone gets back to me on how to resolve it (I'm still learning things x.x). If it persists then it's something else. Unfortunately, I can't be certain as I haven't personally had this error occur.
I already have an update planned to release later today or tomorrow (PDT). I'm still testing and going over it at the moment but I'll remove it then. Sorry for the inconvenience.
Oh, thank you for letting me know! I haven't really used the itch.io app before. I'm trying a different macro but if that doesn't work then I'll keep asking around.
Hi, I'm sorry you're having issues! I have tested on various mobile browsers and a couple other devices and has been working. I will look into the issue more. Could you tell me what it's doing?
Okay okay, SO! I'm a really big fan of IFs, but it's super hard to find ones that actually captivate my attention; much harder to find ones that do and are complete/still being worked on. So, needless to say, you can imagine my joy when finding an IF that meets my criteria. I'm genuinely excited for this story; the chapter was long (longer than I expected, honestly), the customization and choices are great (it's a deal-breaker if I can't be a little bitch to everyone I know) and, best of all, the writing is actually good!! Anyway, long story short, I'm super excited to see what will come of this. Like, really excited. You have a gift, Alahria, and I went into rant-mode just to express that.
TLDR: This was great, keep doin' what you do!
(sorry for the long comment, i got really excited)
THIS is definitely a twine I'm looking forward too <3 I love the mc already and the lore so far is interesting as well as the characters and so many li options <3
Oh I love this :D the characters are amazing, especially because DRAGONS :D and my raven is such a cutie pie <3 Gabriel is so sweet, Leese is interesting (childhood friend <3) you did an amazing job! I'm looking forward to read more!
I'm having trouble playing this on Android. The first page with the content warnings has the next button at the bottom but I can't select it because the menu on the left gets in the way.
I am so excited!! I loved the slow build up you made and the characters were fun to meet as well. (Definitely planning to romance all of them at least once)
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Pretty nice game! Want more… IDK if it's true or not in real phone because I just try to see it in responsive web design mode. When I enable the touch simulation, the game menu doesn't get toggle when it's click. It does appear when you hover over them, but in mobile they don't have hover effect right? Anyway, just want to mention that just in case I'm wrong, I apologize!
No worries! But no, on mobile you tap to open it :)
So now my main issue is how the fuck does one choose who to romance when everyone is written so bloody amazingly. I'm genuinely stuck! Lol this was such a great and pleasant read. And I'm so glad its ongoing and got updated recently. There is such great stories tht get abandoned its wonderful when i find one that is so nice and actually gets updated. This was really so great. I love leese even tho I love everyone right now lmao but he is definitely a front-runner. Love tht the sex scenes aren't all vague because that Normally is a huge disappointment in alot of stories. These are adults after all. So I quite enjoyed those. MC seems to have so much depth I'm excited to continue the story. Overall I just wanted to say well done and thank you! You made my day a bit brighter with this read. ✨️
Thank you! Your comment has also brightened my day :')
It's a damn good game, it has a pretty interesting plot and quite a lot of potential, actually. I'd say that my only complain would be the descriptions and length of the sex scenes, as the currently present ones feel slightly "dull".
Thank you! And I agree. I do feel like my sex scenes are lacking so far. But when I think of how I could improve it, I can't think beyond what's already written. It's definitely something I'm trying to improve here and there as I work on Chapter 3. If you don't mind me asking, in your opinion (and anyone else), what would make it less "dull"? Is it just the length and neeing more details? Maybe another perspective will help me. (Sorry if that's weird to ask)
Although a bit experienced with writing both nsfw and sfw stuff, I can't give a lot of advice, as styles may vary greatly. Still, I would give a more in-depth description of everything that can be described; some more "steamy" descriptions regarding the interaction between the bodies of the individuals involved in the "act", like, how they feel internally and externally (perhaps changing as per previous choices/interactions?), how the enviroment they're in affects their act and all that. I'd also recommend take a look on other works, take them as examples and improve your style's description/length.
I love, love, love it! 🥰🥰🥰
Aww, thank you! I'm so glad you do ♥
Quick question? Will flirting with more than one of them effect their opinion on you? I can't choose between Leese/Lea and Gabriel so I've just been flirting with them both. But I dont wanna do that if it'll cause a bad ending. :(
No, you won't get a bad ending from this. However, some ROs will react if you're flirting with someone else, but under certain circumstances. I don't want to say anymore to avoid spoilers though :>
Oh, this is just, wow!! Love the interactions with the ROs and the world building!! Can't wait for more :))
Save does not work. prompt() is not and will not be supported.
I'm sorry you had this issue. Did this occur when you tried to manually save?
Yes.
Yep, having the same issue!
I'm looking into the problem still but I'm assuming it's something to do with the save name input and certain browsers. I'll probably disable this feature for now until someone gets back to me on how to resolve it (I'm still learning things x.x). If it persists then it's something else. Unfortunately, I can't be certain as I haven't personally had this error occur.
I already have an update planned to release later today or tomorrow (PDT). I'm still testing and going over it at the moment but I'll remove it then. Sorry for the inconvenience.
Well, maybe it's because i'm using Itch.io app, but I've never personally seen this error before... I tried on Chrome and it worked perfectly!
Oh, thank you for letting me know! I haven't really used the itch.io app before. I'm trying a different macro but if that doesn't work then I'll keep asking around.
I found this
https://www.google.com/search?q=twine+story+prompt%28%29+is+not+and+will+not+be+...
Damn, Mc has immaculate rizz 🤣🤣🤣💀💀
Hi! I'm trying to play on the mobile but the game doesn't open, you could fix it? Thanks for the update!❤️❤️
Hi, I'm sorry you're having issues! I have tested on various mobile browsers and a couple other devices and has been working. I will look into the issue more. Could you tell me what it's doing?
oh, your update was wonderful, I had really fun to read more about the characters :D you did amazing!!
Thank you so much, I'm glad you liked it! :)
Was wondering do you have a Tumblr to follow? Loved Chapter 2 by the way Lyth is my fave so far
I do not. I plan on making one some time this coming week though :)
Awesome!
I really love this game, your writing and the characters are amazing!
Chapter 2 was seriously great, I am going to be patiently waiting for the next chapter. Thank you for writing such a good story!!
Thank you so much! ♥
WOW this is good!
This is really good. can't wait to see when more comes. Good luck with writing *smiles*
Okay okay, SO!
I'm a really big fan of IFs, but it's super hard to find ones that actually captivate my attention; much harder to find ones that do and are complete/still being worked on.
So, needless to say, you can imagine my joy when finding an IF that meets my criteria.
I'm genuinely excited for this story; the chapter was long (longer than I expected, honestly), the customization and choices are great (it's a deal-breaker if I can't be a little bitch to everyone I know) and, best of all, the writing is actually good!!
Anyway, long story short, I'm super excited to see what will come of this. Like, really excited. You have a gift, Alahria, and I went into rant-mode just to express that.
TLDR: This was great, keep doin' what you do!
(sorry for the long comment, i got really excited)
Thank you so much! I really appreciate this ♥
THIS is definitely a twine I'm looking forward too <3 I love the mc already and the lore so far is interesting as well as the characters and so many li options <3
I hope you enjoy meeting the rest of the characters :)
Oh I love this :D the characters are amazing, especially because DRAGONS :D and my raven is such a cutie pie <3 Gabriel is so sweet, Leese is interesting (childhood friend <3) you did an amazing job! I'm looking forward to read more!
Thank you! ♥
This is really good! A couple of minor typos here and there but nothing egregious, I can't wait for your next update!
Thank you! :)
I'm having trouble playing this on Android. The first page with the content warnings has the next button at the bottom but I can't select it because the menu on the left gets in the way.
Hope you can fix this.
Sorry for the inconvenience. I have re-enabled the menu toggle, please let me know if this helps!
I am so excited!! I loved the slow build up you made and the characters were fun to meet as well. (Definitely planning to romance all of them at least once)
Thank you! :)