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How old are Harus? I need to know if I can call him daddy or not /hj

now seriously, I loved this piece of art, from the characters to the style of writing, all the plot and trauma is just *chef kiss*, thanks for all your hard work

(seriously, tho, Harus is much more old than MC?? I NEED TO KNOW : (((( )

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Thank you! I answered this question on Tumblr, just be warned of its potential spoiler.

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I won't get tired of reading this story multiple times while waiting for the next update, the freedom it gives you is just amazing. It's been a long time since I felt so attracted to a novel, I'm looking forward for chapter 4 and more. (sorry for my english, i'm not a native english speaker)

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I'm well into my second time reading this story, and love it so much!

I am trying to get into twine and am very confused about it, and this is a work of art!
Do you think you could share some tips or pointers on anything?

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I'm sorry for the late response. I generally Google whatever I'm trying to figure out, understanding comes slowly but I encourage you not to give up! I used these two most:

Idrelle Games (author of Wayfarer) has a few nice tutorials here.

Hi-Ev's guide has useful information as well, found here.

The Twine documentation might feel intimidating at first, but you'll understand it the more you learn. I wish you luck and the best!

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Thank you!

I have actually read Wayfarer before, I didn’t even think to look for a tutorial, thanks for the heads up!

I really loved this story, and have read it 3 times already XD.

I just love the backstory and the level of detail to the story even without sight in incredible. I even feel the stress of needing to put the blindfold back on so we don’t get caught! Like in the beginning, walking back to town with the constructs head on my bag, I kept yelling ‘put the blindfold on!’ thinking the thing watching us would find me out XD

Can’t wait for the next update!

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Love the writing
(can't wait for the next update)

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is harus a child predator in one of the paths..??

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No. I'm sorry if it wasn't clear: the MC is almost 27 and the possible relationship with Harus started 3 years ago. If you're concerned in the aspect of grooming, this was not the case. The dynamics between Harus and the MC will be explored, but it's important to note that nothing occurred until the MC was of age and was initiated under the MC's volition.

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oh, that's a relief. thank you for the clarification 🙏❤️

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This is so good! I got hooked into it so bad that i kinda didn't sleep all night. I may have perhaps restarted to much... I can't wait for more chapters to come out! ;_; it's really one of the best text based ones I've played. 

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this is one of the most beautiful stories I've read, amazing work authorrrr <3333

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AHHHHH!!!!! i am in love with this. thank you so much author

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AHH! I love thiiiss!!! I love the story and the characters! Gabriel my beloved... I can't wait for the next update!!

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came back for a reread and the writing feels even better 💗 i can't wait for part 2! one thing i'm curious about is having chosen to prefer physical prowess to magic initially, i'd like to balance them out so they're pretty similar; will there be any choices later in the game that we get locked out of if we don't focus on one skill, either magic or physical prowess? will increasing them equally lock us out of the higher difficulty choices for both?

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also... the slowburn with lee is killing me 😭❤️‍🩹

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But, it will make it SO much better in the end

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I've played this IF dozens of times but I've always accepted Gabriel's help in Chotou. For the first time, I didn't, and HOLY FUCK THAT CHANGES EVERYTHING. I shall say no more bc spoilers but needless to say, I'm obsessed and I love this IF even more.

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Looks like....It's time for me to read this once again.

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omg so good I can't wait for more and hope you can finally remove the blind fold D: 

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I played this game a while ago and came back to check on it and omg thank you so much for adding the OpenDyslexic font! I find it so hard to read some If's because they don't have the choice to change the fonts but thank you so much for this!!!<3

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Literally how do I get past the first page

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Scroll down?

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What the hell Allen

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just finished the available content and this is bliss and torture at the same time. This game is just amazing and everything I was looking for, you did a dazzling work dang! the history is so well-built; the charachters are all very different and extremely well written + im drooling over that plot like WOW IT'S SO GOOD

anyways hum hum i love this game.

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bro I am so heartbroken there’s not more out this shit was absolutely amazing bro I got so invested in my character I cannot wait to play this in its entirety 

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Hello author! Very nicely written story! I'm looking forward to what you have in store for the future.

That being said, I have one question. The question itself isn't spoiler-y but any answer might involve spoilers. I don't mind spoilers myself but I just figured I'd mention it for anyone else reading my comment. It's related to the ROs though and IDK how else to ask. It's a bit important for my own reading experience.


QUESTION:


There are various supernatural races in this game, with different lifespans. Do I need to be concerned about any differences in longevity between the protagonist and their RO? I'd prefer to avoid a situation where my protagonist ends up inevitably dying of old age and the partner moves on to some other romance afterwards. Maybe the story doesn't even plan on addressing that - but thinking realistically, it seems like a pretty important thing to consider, between two people. And honestly, if I knew the RO was just going to move on like that, as they live for hundreds more years or whatever, it'd ruin the whole story for me. I'm still traumatized (okay, I'm being a little dramatic) from Spice and Wolf. Please give me the hard-hitting truth now before I go through hours and hours of wholesome romance only for it to end in (what I consider to be) tragedy. 

I just greatly prefer romances where the characters stay together forever afterwards and there's no one else after that. So if lifespan considerations are relevant, it'll affect who I decide to romance. 

Thank you. 

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I'm glad you're enjoying the story! Your question is valid, and I very much understand how you feel about this aspect. I'm going to try and hide a vague answer because I know this is important to some people. However, while vague, I feel it may be a sort of spoiler, so read at your own discretion.













While I cannot reveal specifics, I can assure you that I've taken into account the different lifespans and the implications they have for relationships in the story. I cannot say much else, but only please try not to worry about this element!

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Thanks for the response!!

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I LOVE THIS SOOOO MUCH, i'm really excited to see the next part!!!! also leese has my heart <33

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just started the game. it was seeming a little dark and serious so to keep things light i named the bird Fuckbeak

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I'm done lol

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How can this be so good!!!? I came into the game, trying to woo Admos. But Lyth has throughly woo me instead!!! 😔❤️

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Wanted to read but cannot couldn't change font's size on my phone, otherwise the text on mobile is very very small. A shame, was interested.

There is an option to change font size on mobile. I believe the setting is at the bottom of the screen — tap the three lines and it should a show a list of tabs and the cog wheel for the settings. I hope that helps!

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AUTHORRRRRR RAHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH, I JUST WANT YOU TO KNOW HOW YOU WRITE SO BEAUTIFULLY AND HOW YOU WRITE WITH AN EMOTIONS ESPECIALLY THE POLY SCENES HUHUHUHUH. ANYWAYS, HERE ARE SOME AI ART OF THE MALES RO, HOPE YOU DONT MIND AND IM ALWAYS HERE LURKING IN THE SHADOWS WAITING FOR YOU UPDATE HAHAHAHAHA HAPPY NEW YEAR!!!

Admos de Le Wren ─ Male
Admos de Le Wren ─ Male. Alabaster skin with a grey hue that naturally darkens his lips. Golden Eyes, Large black horns that curve in and out. Silver hair that reaches his mid-back. Manicured nails sit upon fingers that darken at the tips. 6'4 feet height, and a wiry build. Overall soft but sharp features.
Lyth de Le Wren - Male [Draconian]
Lyth de Le Wren - Male [Draconian]. Pale-ivory skin and cherry lips, the grey hue is absent from this draconian. Yellow eyes, 5'11 feet heights, and a lean build. Long, light blonde hair that grows past the shoulders, usually styled in various looks. Lyth has dark and well-polished horns that curve back and up like an S.
Leese Van Laere ─ Male | Human | Vampire.
Leese Van Laere ─ Male | Human | Vampire. Honey skin with dimpled cheeks. Hazel eyes, 6'0 feet heights, Well-built and broad shoulders build. Golden-brown curled hair, Leese lets it grow just past his stubbled jaw. A square face with a wide and chiseled jaw.
Xiang Xiaowen - Male [Human]
Xiang Xiaowen - Male [Human]. Dewy, porcelain skin. Raven black hair that grows past their shoulders. Golden Brown eyes, 5'11 feet of height, with a willowy build. A well-sculpted oval face with monolid eyes.
Gabriel Duarte ─ Male | Human
Gabriel Duarte ─ Male | Human. Rose beige skin. Strikingly red hair that almost grows to their shoulders, which they half tie back. Heterochromatic eyes, green on right and blue on left. 6'1 feet of height, and a brawny build. Gabriel has a well-kept and trimmed beard and a rectangular face.
Alyosha Morozov - Male [Human] [???]
Alyosha Morozov - Male [Human] [???]. My Character 
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I love theseee, QUESTION THOUGH did you use an app for this?? I can't find any good ai makers

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Bing ai image creator, put in description and it will give you a lot of results 😁

Aaaaaaaa tysmm!!!!🙏🏼😊

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So first (and this isn't directed at you), I'm not going to dive into the subject of AI art because when I shared my results a couple months ago, it sparked some drama, I suppose. Regardless, I understand the controversies surrounding it better now.

With that out of the way, I'm going to assume this is ChatGPT because the images of Lyth and Admos are near identical to the results I got lmao.

When I tried generating Admos and Lyth, it took me quite a few tries to get the AI to make them right. If you tell it they're basically elves with horns you should get results similar to how I pictured them. Before that, I kept getting images that seemed like a mashup of Avatar aliens and dragons with fancy mustaches.

I have some poorly drawn Admos images from a couple years ago ─ I might share them but his design changed some since then. I have ones of Lyth and Xiaowen as well but they are older and terrible (I'll be honest, I'm insecure with my art). 

However, thinking of these drawings makes me remember the original version of the story ─ ohhh the nostalgia. It makes me want to go back and revisit my old ideas and see if I can make them into a new story.

Thank you for sharing, and I'm so glad you enjoy WYE!

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AUTHORRRRR AHHHHHH, I REALLY LIKE YOUR STORY. AND ALSO THIS IS AI IMAGE BY BING, THEY CREATE BETTER ARTS THAN CHATGPT. ANYWAYS, I DONT UNDERSTAND ON WHY SOME PEOPLE HATE YOU USING AI, BUT STILL I WILL CONTINUE SUPPORTING YOUR STORYYYYYY HEHEHEHEHHE

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Hey, I saw your name and just wanted to say I hope you're okay. I don't know what you are going through, but maybe professional help is the answer, or talking to a trusted friend about what you are going through. People care about you, even if it may not feel like it at times.  Wish you the best.

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I LOVE THIS, *chefs kiss* also definitely not me flirting with EVERY RO in the game at every opportunity 😭

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😭

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I'm not gonna beat around the bush, this is one of the best IF's I've ever played.
From setting to characters and writing everything sits right with me. In short, I love it!

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I read a lot of stories in here, and I must say, this is one of the best. The worldbuilding is really good so far, you can see the amount of love and dedication to the proyect. All the characters so far are really charming on their own way (like, wasn't expecting Gabriel to be such a flirt and I absolutely love it). I really like the interactions, and I loved that se can read their thoughs after talking to the warden in situations like in the camp, and I love even more the interactions that the poly routes have (only played the Gabriel and van Leare, but assume the other ones will have similar moments like the one those two have at camp). Love the Warden as an MC, and if something happends to the raven I will riot. And way the plot is being set up is amazing, and really makes me want to read more. Take your time, you are doing amazing, but also can't wait for more.

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Question; how old is the warden? I know that they are around 26, but are they still 25 or turning 27?

Also, is nautical lost set in the same universe as this? (Asking because the rapier says it's from Valia) 

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They are almost 27 and yes, Nautical Lost is set in the same world. Sorry for the late reply!

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This story is easily one of the best WIPS out there. I was immediately drawn in by the plot and writing, but especially by your characters. It is a rare IF that makes me want to romance more than one character (usually two at most), but I have to replay this so many times because I literally want them all! Well done!

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This story is truely fantastic and I was delighted to hear of chapter 3 part 1's release. I discovered Within Your Eyes shortly after chapter 2 was released.

Leese Van Laere has my whole heart and I'm terrified of when our secrets are revealed to him. While I'm definitely going to do several playthroughs to see differen't choices, Leese and Gabriel's poly route is my 'canon' and I really like how the poly choices show a budding connection between the two, not just between them and the warden.

I simply can't wait for more, yet I hope you take your time to craft the story you want to tell. Books can take many years to write and I hope you don't hold yourself to a schedule that burns you out. Your story is worth however long it takes to make!

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LIGHT SPOILERS




Must. Tell. Childhood. Crush. My. Identity. 😣

Will we eventually be able to restore Elies to the throne?

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Must. Tell. Childhood. Crush. My. Identity. 😣 < this x1000

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At this point, I don't think we are going to tell them anything. I'm pretty sure that they are going to find out on their own. A passage after finding Lea/Leese in the forest: "She(the warden) is starting to remind her(Lea/Leese) of *her*."

(** Means italicized) 

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I'm enjoying this game a lot! I appreciate the detailed prose and emphasis on player agency. The story really pulls me in.


I was wondering, though, if there's a downloadable version available? I keep getting stuck, unable to click on menu options because the UI doesn't work well on my mobile device. Since this is a Twine game I was hoping it could be downloaded to run on JoiPlay.

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I'm sorry you were having that issue! I'm having some trouble getting a download version to work as it wants to keep replacing the main one. There's probably something I'm missing (I'm very confused with itch.io, I'm so sorry), please bear with me!

Edit: I'm dumb, it needed a different name. It's there now!

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fantastic!! lyth/lyari is a brazen little imp draconian and i look forward to seeing how the warden handles their seemingly on-brand, shameless snooping in the future. also harus and the warden's endearingly fickle raven friend are very interesting :DD, and so are the demons skeletons hiding in the warden's closet! 👍 all in all, 10/10, would read ten times over again, ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️ x2 = 10 STARS

favorite character would have to be the basilisk that the warden could choose to slay over the other two monsters. 'basilisk' is just one of my favorite words. its etymology is irresistible. and THE mythological basilisk is one of my favorite creatures of myth, and so i could. not. help. myself

just kidding :DD my favorite character is probably lyth/lyari. but do know that i kill that basilisk every single time regardless of who the warden is whatever time around. i'm glad that you included it >:D

lastly, i HIGHLY enjoy the guilt meter, in particular the fact that it's the only meter on the warden's profile page, iirc. it's an interesting little feature that's distinctive to this IN, and i like to think about how its flux will affect the story moving forwards!! wonderful work :D

as a side note, i love the inclusion of an allosexual aromantic option when it comes to determining the warden's sexuality. other INs include it, but not all (understandably!), and so i'm personally glad that yours is among those INs who do :) ⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️⭐️!!!

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this is the best game ive ever found on here omg 😭 the writing is masterful and the story is an absolute gem. i love absolutely everything about it!! the warden's trauma really tugged on my heartstrings and i adore all the characters especially lea 🥺💗 i need to protect her💔!!

i did notice some spelling and grammatical errors during various chapters that came up in the choices, as well as one during the actual story and a single instance where gabriel's gender (set to female) swapped to male. they were pretty rare and all very minor but ill do my best to go back through and report them on your google form!

also! can i ask when you're expecting to put out the next part/chapter, if you have a planned schedule or any idea how long it might take? no rush, and ill be here for it regardless! ive just come to the end of this and its so brilliant im begging

i created an account just to say this anyway thank u so so much for making this game

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Thank you so much for going the extra mile to create an account and share your thoughts ─ that's incredibly sweet of you! ♥ Your kind words mean a lot to me. 

Regarding the spelling and grammatical errors, I truly appreciate your willingness to help out. Please feel free to report them whenever convenient, but remember, there's no pressure to backtrack. 

As for the release of Part Two, I don’t have a specific date in mind yet. However, I'm aiming for it to be completed sooner than Part One. During the creation of Part One, I encountered challenges like lack of confidence and writer's block (and maybe a slight addiction to Baldur's Gate 3), which I'm hoping to manage better this time around. Your support and patience as I work through this process are greatly appreciated! 

Thank you so much once again for your wonderful words and support!

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no worries! the game was good enough i felt obliged 😭

ill report any more errors i find when i replay this after the next update drops!

and thank u for answering time frame question! dont feel any need to rush urself, work at ur own pace and we'll be waiting eagerly for whatever comes next! have confidence in ur writing; it's gorgeous <3

thanks agin for creating such a great game and i cant wait to see what happens next! 💗

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THIS NEEDS AN UPDATE SOON PLEASEEEEEEEEEE

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I hope my next update won't be too long a wait! I appreciate the enthusiasm 😁

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THIS IS FUCKING AMAZING WHAT THE FUCK I'M OBSESSED

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Is there a lore reason why the Warden can't have red/ginger hair? Like if it is particular to a certain region or people that aren't in Lenia or something like that? 
I was making my second read-through character more like myself until I reached that point and went "Oh. It's not there."

It's not a huge deal but I'm curious. Burgundy Red just isn't the same.
Very enjoyable and engaging read, by the way.

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Originally, I just couldn't think of what colors to add ^^;

I don't mind adding these options!

Cheers! The hair color rarely if ever comes up so it's really not a problem. 
My lazy solution would be to just call it Red and let people project whichever kind of red onto it. Unless you sometimes have descriptives tied to the colors, in which case it would get annoying for you.

I was honestly more curious to know if there was going to be a region full of gingers somewhere down the line or something! Or it be a special family's trait.

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In times like these, your ability come to the forefront. While it takes a heavy toll on you, your ability to inspire and lead others is your greatest asset. It's what helped you prevail against the basilisk and various other monsters when you couldn't see.

Is this a bug? Charisma and teamwork are my lowest stats.

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This is an amazing game, you are doing great, keep it up, and other encouraging words!


I write a bit and recently found twine and started making my own game, and this is honestly everything I strive to be. Good job!

I found an error

The cut out part reads: 

<<if $chapter3.includes("Hangover")>>[[Chapter Three|Ch3HangoverPt1]]<<elseif $chapter2.includes("LySleep")>>[[Chapter Three|Ch3LyRoomWake][$chapter3.push("LyWake")]]<<else>>[[Chapter Three|Ch3RoomWake]]<</if>>
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Please disregard this message if you have a distaste for lengthy messages, as I must confess that I couldn't hold back my cascading stream of words 😭.

I am utterly awe-struck and at a loss for words to express the sheer magnificence of this interactive fiction, Its nothing short of extraordinary; Allow me to confess, perhaps for the first time, that the opening quote attributed to the brilliant Fyodor Dostoevsky holds a special place in my heart. His literary prowess has always enchanted me✨.

And oh, dear heavens, let it be known that the POVs of the ROs within this story are incredibly vital, and your masterful writing brings them to life in the most enchanting way. Your impeccable skills in crafting these narratives is truly unparalleled. I find unparalleled joy in devouring every single one of them, and I simply cannot resist singling out the POVs of Leese. He's different 🌝❤️

My dear author, you have bewitched me completely. The allure of Leese's enchanting character is both exhilarating and tormenting, I eagerly anticipate the clicmatic "reveal" that lies ahead.

As a student of psychology, I must confess that I yearn for my university textbooks to captivate me in the same way your beautifully crafted words do. Your intricate and detailed descriptions of emotional transformations and conflicts are an absolute delight to read. Each passage feels like a precious gift.

I am glad by the opportunity we were given to explore the MC's tumultuous past, which unveils a heart-wrenching tale. It becomes clear why she carries herself the way she does, and yet, there is still an air of mystery surrounding her. My mind is teeming with theories that both excite and consume me, so many questions about the parents 💀.

The epic clash with the golem during the journey to the capital was nothing short of awe-inspiring. Let me assure you, dear author, my MC left everyone breathless with her astonishing prowess 😩. 

I apologize if I'm rambling, but I hope you can bear with my overflowing. I am truly grateful for the opportunity to immerse myself in such exquisite storytelling.

I shall go to bed now....

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Thank you so much for your incredibly kind words! I'm so deeply touched and overwhelmed in a good way. It means the world to me to hear how much you've connected with the characters, especially Lee.

I'm glad to hear that the story resonates with you on such a personal level, and that it has even made a connection with you studying psychology (and I wish you the best on your journey!). Admittingly, psychology isn't something I've studied much. I base my characters off real emotions I've felt and experienced, while also researching just enough to ensure some things make sense. You saying that makes me feel a lot better about how I convey the emotions my characters portray. It's also a badge of honor knowing I've successfully made the MC feel like the most fascinating of the cast so far.

Your message is far from rambling! It's a joy to read and truly appreciated. All of these heartfelt messages are what inspire me to keep writing and creating. Thank you again for taking the time to share your thoughts, and I hope the story continues to captivate you in chapters to come!

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Thank you for responding ✨. Your ability to convey authentic emotions through your characters is truly remarkable. Knowing that my words have encouraged and inspired you means a lot 💕. I'm eagerly looking forward to the upcoming chapters and where the story takes us next. Thank you for sharing your talent and creating such an impactful narrative!

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